Of Whirls and Rage

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“Fire”

It was the last word that Ellen heard as bullets came raining towards their location. No time to process what’s currently happening to them; they have to search for a hiding place as fast as they can. It is inevitable for things like that to happen in a place wherein always at war with people who have beliefs that’s opposite to theirs. Not one of them surrenders nor concedes since each party claims to be the rightful. Causing the lives of the innocents to get sacrificed is nothing just to protect each other's beliefs. A decade isn’t enough to declare it as over, but it will still continue as long as each of them wouldn’t get drained of their resources, of manpower, and of hatred that seems like it is set to forever rage within their hearts.

As Ellen ducked behind the pile of sandbags for cover, she is contemplating what's going to become of them now. They went here for a mission of good intentions but didn't expect to get caught up in a raging war where bullets fly ablaze towards the enemy's direction. Their mission is to teach the people who signed up to their program about disaster risk reduction, readiness, and management, but even then, they aren’t prepared for such incidents like this. After a while of the deafening firings and explosions, their surroundings finally went silent.

Is it good news or not?

Confirming their speculations aside for a little longer, they waited. A few minutes have passed, and the place stays still; reassuring their safety. Slowly, they rise from the ground but before they can stand still, a series of guns are reloaded and are all aimed at her team. The ones’ left breathing in the camp are them, and the soldiers all lying on the ground, bathing in their own blood. Instinctively, they raise both of their shaky hands fearing for their lives. “Medics are kept unharmed in a war, Madam. Follow us!” The captain of the enemies have declared.

With their hands still up high and guns pointed at them, they followed these notorious men in a path directed to their hideout. A lofty forest with a narrowed path and vines are side by side of the road, then one time she stumbled down upon it. The man behind her back shouted commanding her to get up faster, and continue walking. They are unharmed at the moment but the experience is still traumatizing, sending chills to every inch of her body. Just like watching a horror movie, she was shaking intensely as she got up, feeling the real horror from their current situation.

The walk in a path of hell continues but she and her team couldn’t stop walking though it is driving them all crazy. The promise of not hurting them is set, but their future is still unknown. What could be these men’s purpose of taking them as a hostage? A bait between their fight with the government? It’s expected, but she is thinking of other possible things that they will be doing with them. Also, the possibilities that they will set them free or they could escape from their grasps.

Before she could think of anything else, one of these notorious men screamed at the back and everybody turned their heads towards him. An arrow was pierced in his heart and there he was lying on the ground. One after another, they fell down to the ground until none of them were standing still. Ellen and her team felt relief for a moment, not until another group showed up. Bows and arrows are on the arms of some, and some are holding swords looking at them fiercely as if they are going to devour them alive. The feeling of relief fleets in an instant and the fears from earlier are retrieved.

An old man crouching with his walking stick appeared from the crowd of a tribe, then walked toward her. He stopped in front of her with sympathetic eyes, ready to break down at any moment and told her, “There’s an uncanny resemblance of your father in you. Let’s get you somewhere safe.” Her father? It was mentioned to her before that her father had a great time in this place during his younger years, but never did she expect for him to have such a connection that would save her life from an imminent danger.


Hello, scholar and scribe community. This is my first time posting here. The story that I have shared above was a product of my imaginations derived from my free time. I hope you like that. Anyways, thanks for reading!



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Hello @ayane-chan and welcome to Scholar and Scribe! 😁

I see you using our tag which is very important in this community. If you haven't, I urge you to read up on our community guidelines which highlight the importance of our revolutionary tokens. 🙂

As for your story you write in such an intriguing style. I've honestly never seen the passive voice used in such a way. It's very interesting. I gather you're doing it without thinking, and if so, I suggest you read up on passive voice and what it means. You might find it helpful in your writing.

This feels like a first chapter however, and open ended story. Is the man lying at the end? Will they mistreatment her over some misunderstanding? Guess that's for us to decide. 😁 I also love the title of the piece, very provocative.

Welcome again and I hope you have a lovely day. 👋

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I haven't written any fiction stories for a while now, so maybe that's why. I'm still familiarizing myself from the rules of writing again. I just felt that my writing skills are getting dull, so I tried reviving it. haha Thanks for the suggestions. I'll read them for sure. Thanks also for the warm welcome.

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Greetings fellow folk! @ayane-chan. As usual, my mind is already calculating different the situations TT. I wouldn't thought they will be saved by a 'forest tribe'. I always loved when there will always be an unexpected company in the last part of the story it's either positive or negative, neither of these, it still amazes me. Keep on writing! Let's bloom all together. AJA!

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I used up most of my literature batteries in the last part, and I was thinking that it's gonna be boring. But, thanks for appreciating it, bree.

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I like this, your descriptions are great, they really painted a picture in my mind of the wider battle scene but kept me grounded in the head of Ellen having to deal with it while being in the thick of the fight.

I thought it was a cool twist of events at the end, the captors are killed only for the characters to feel tension once more at the sight of new warriors but, then they were relieved. I liked it! Will there be a continuation?

Also, welcome to Scholar and Scribe, there's a great community here, that love serialized content and standalone pieces, also, there are sometimes writing contests run here, and sometimes posts are written directing us to writing contests outside of the community!

!PIZZA

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I don't think that there would be any continuation, unfortunately. I wrote that story from the whims of my imaginations but I can't think of anything for the next scenes. Sorry about that. It's hard to revive such passion for writing when you aren't doing it for a long time. Hopefully, I'll try to bring that kind of drive that I had back then when I was still actively writing some creative pieces, so I can share it here.

Thanks for the warm welcome, by the way. Yeah, I see an ongoing contest pinned in the community. Maybe, next time I can try yo join in the future contests of the community. I'm still exploring, and I have read a lot of amazing pieces already. I admit that I'm loving it here now. 😊

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That's great to hear that you're enjoying your time in the community, it's a really cool place! There are a lot of really talented people here.

That's a shame you're not sure if there'll be a continuation but, I totally understand why that is. I sometimes get jolts of passion and write amazing pieces, then some days it's just going through the motions. But, I will say one thing, I've had stories that I've taken a break from and came back to down the line and fell in love with them and wrote like a demon. So, never say never as the saying goes haha

!PIZZA

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Welcome to Scholar and Scribe! 😊
Feel free to pop over to PIZZA - S&S Discord too! https://discord.gg/hivepizza

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Thank you for welcoming me. Yes, I'm already at the Pizza Discord Server. Thanks for sharing the inviation. I'll try to drop by when I can have some free time.

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