RE: Thankful

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The line

Take a knife and whittle

spoke to me. It expresses the truth that even working on trauma or memories of trauma can itself be painful. I think it was a good choice to separate the stanzas with the images; it provides a necessary beat; the progression of thought would be to quick otherwise. Finally, I like how you show the shift to gratitude in the final stanza by dropping the rhyme. Nice job.



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