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Walking home from escorting Mom to the junction, I don't anticipate spending the night alone. But she needs to attend her vigil at church and I don't really like those.

"Remember to pray before you sleep." She always says that each time and yet, I've never once listened to or done what she said.

The street leading up to the house, a small two bedroom cabin, is dark save for my flashlight. There was a powercut but they said it'll only be for a few hours. I catch a glimpse of Mrs. Cherry, our distant neighbor, walking up her front door.

Situated in the woods, I love the sense of belonging I have with nature but during times like these, I hate it. The darkness crawling up my skin makes me pick up pace.

The wood on the porch creaks lightly reminding me that we have to fix it. I make a mental note and get into the house, shutting the door behind me. I quickly find the lamp and turn it on using the lighter that's always in my pocket. I mean, I thought I'd be watching Queen Charlotte tonight. But I guess not. I should have probably just followed Mom but the last thing I want to hear is the talk about hell and sinners. I make a detour for the kitchen, taking the last bite of chocolate before heading for my room, licking my fingers.

My bedroom has to be the most boring part of this house. Plain and just…plain. A bed, a wardrobe and a coffee table. That's it. I should add some decorations but I get lazy.

I lie down and prop my feet on the bed, phishing out my phone; I remembered to charge it earlier today. I have a voice message from Lillian,

"Hey Vivian. Are you coming to the bon fire?"

Ugh! I totally forgot but that's probably because I wasn't planning on going anyway. Too much crowd and too much pressure. Lillian used to prefer being with me but I guess she wants the popular crowd now. I quickly type a message of an apology I don't feel and proceed to stalk YouTube. I should catch up on America's Got Talent.

A faint noise outside my door has me pausing the video. The lamp flickers on my table. I should have closed my window. When did the wind pick up and how long have I been in this position? A glance at my phone says it's almost eleven.

I proceed to shut the window but halt when I see what seems to be a shadow. I can vaguely make a head popping out from behind a tree but I'm not sure. In the dark, these woods can lie. I slam my windows shut and go back to bed, resuming my video. My phone chimes again with another message from Lillian. It's a photo of her and Jake Beward. Quarter back and the most annoying jock in the history of jocks. Yep. There goes our friendship.

The lamp flickers again and goes out.

"Oh come on!" I mutter outloud. I reach for my pocket but the lighter isn't there. Typical. Must have left it in the living room. I turn on my flashlight and go to retrieve it. A gust of air hits me when I swing my door open.

"Jesus." I mutter, wondering what's with the sudden temperature drop. The lighter is sitting on the small stool where we place the lamp for easy retrieval. I turn to head back to my room but notice the windows open. I thought I locked it before leaving the house...

That train of thought ends quickly because I'm walking to the window to lock it. Again. When I turn around, my heart lurches. Something or someone just ran towards my room. My feet halts, my blood roaring in my ears. I must be seeing things. I shake my head and return back to my room, shutting the door behind me and…going still as I stare at my open windows.

My breath catches in my throat, my heart racing. My phone pings on the bed. A distraction. Good. I don't want to think right now. I pick it up and it's a message from Lillian. A cryptic one.

"P…your door."

"What?" I text back. She doesn't respond. I drop my phone into my pocket and take tentative steps to my window. The wind from it caresses my skin but unlike other times, this one makes me feel really uncomfortable. Slowly, I stalk to the window…and scream bloody murder when someone suddenly appears in front of me. I land on my ass and push myself backward, trying but failing to get up as the trespasser climbs in.

He or she is covered from head to toe in black, the knife in their hand glinting promises of pain. I turn and push myself up, but get pulled back by their hand on my leg forcing me to land on my back facing them. I scream, my voice cracking as panic climbs my being. They lift the knife and then the power comes on.

I'm assaulted by the bright light and so is the assailant because they drop my leg and cuss. The voice is awfully familiar.

"Lillian…?" I say, resting on my elbows looking up in shock. A burst of laughter has me turning to my door. Jake. He's bent over and laughing so hard his ribs must be on fire. Lillian joins him.

I scurry to my feet, weary and perplexed, "what the hell is going on here?"

"You should have heard yourself," he says and then begins to mock my screams. Lillian is bent over laughing too, the knife falls out of her grip and onto the floor. I look at my friend feeling betrayed.

"Was this a prank?!" I don't mean for my voice to go high but it does.

"I'm sorry. I really didn't want to but Jake is such a genius with his plans."

The culprit gives me a loopy smirk, his hands tucked in his pockets. I turn to my friend who's now looking unsure. She should.

"Well I'm glad I could satisfy both your cravings. Now get out of my house."

Lillian's face falls, "Vivian. I'm sorry, I didn't mean–"

"Oh, can it!" Jake interrupts, "if she wants to be so stuck up, let her. Don't get why you stick with her anyway. Come on. Let's go." He stretches his hand and my friend and I stare each other in the eye for a while.

I don't know why this feels like she gets to choose but it does. I wait, heart in my stomach, for her response. We've been friends since elementary school. Her eyes bounces between I and Jake. And I know. I immediately know who she's chosen.

"Go." I tell her. Her eyes dim a little but then she nods and leaves with the jock. I stand in my room a little teary eyed as I stare at the knife lying there.


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Lillian is not sorry at all, and will get her come uppance soon enough hanging around with that arse!

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Oh she will. I just wish I'd be there to see it.

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Thank you so much Buzzy!!!❤️❤️

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All good @deraaa! You are a true inspiration for Hive! Keep going and reach your new target!

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Oh, pheww. Well, it turned out to be a painful prank. Jake does need a blow.

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What a gripping tale! You had me on the edge of my seat from start to finish. I enjoyed the suspense and twists and the vivid descriptions made me feel Vivian's fear and panic. Naughty Lilian and Jake! Sadly, she chose Jake. You did great with this week's prompt. !LUV 🙂

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Thank you so much. I really enjoyed it although it took hours. First time in this genre...

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So as she stared at the knife, what now happened. I hope she doesn't start going on a murder spree. Because you know what they say, "like character....like writer." Actually no one says that, but I've made it up. Just for you.
It's how I already knew you wouldn't be the one chosen. Bad Lilian!

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Wahala!!! You mean I'll start going on a killing spree? 😂... This girl! Bad bad Lillian 🤣. See this girl. Na dog?

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Na how she portray herself na. She no try at all.😂😂

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Well, Lillian has chosen her path and there's no changing that.. but that was a very risky prank though.

Normal instinct would have been self defense. Who knows what weapon would have been used against them.

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I would have shot and ask questions later...
Thank you for your comment ❤️

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Hehe

You're very much welcome ✨

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You must be a lover of horror to have made this up. I really enjoyed this story as it turns out that Lillian and her boyfriend decided to prank her. I thought something bad would happened. Lol
I popped in through #dreemport

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I don't love horror. I just like to try new things and I had to sit in the dark to write this story. I'm scared of the dark...😂. So it was me writing while imagining horrible things. Thank you so much for your presence!!

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Tense, well paced, suspenseful read. You set up the scene so perfectly through the little details, the chill of the breeze and the loneliness of the forest. The entire frightening episode comes full circle with the eye-contact between the protagonists; this interaction is really scary, far more frightening than any monster. A friend going through with an ill advised prank and then turning away without a real apology. Riveting stuff!

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Thank you so much InkWell. I loved trying this out and I'm not sure I'll try it again as I nearly screamed the house down when I accidentally felt my bathroom door and thought it was something else 😅

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Very good story, I was really in suspense throughout the development of it. Very good suspense you gave the plot and you kept me expectant until the last. It really was a joke very heavy that stopped hearts. Excellent work.

Thanks for sharing.
Good day.

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Thank you so much. I really enjoyed it. But I wasn't able to sleep peacefully. Horror/thrillers aren't for me honestly... I get scared easily. But I promised to improve so I'll keep doing what I can.

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Damn, I would definitely murder Lilian if I was in that situation, what kind of a prank is that. And making use of real weapon is just way out of line, what if someone was mistakenly stabbed by the knife?

Jake Smiling, I would have knock off that smirk from his face with my phone screen or kick his balls so hard that he can't recover from the pain, a permanent reminder of the nasty prank he pulled.

Just realise the write up is fictional, I'm already pissed off 😂😂.

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🤣🤣🤣 you won't make for a good protagonist. You're more pissed than scared! Na wa o. Thank you so much for your engaging comment and your heartfelt note. I really appreciate it ❤️❤️❤️

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hehehehe ohhhhhhhhhh i'm glad I got your story in DreemPort today!!! you!!!! You had me so scared. hahahaha I don't like horror but I couldnt stop reading!

I'm glad it was a prank cuz I can't take too much fear hahahaha - but what a jerk her friend was

ok but... what was the P... in the message?!?!? LOL

I kept trying to figure it out hahahaha

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I feel sorry for Lilian, but she’s better off alone. The whole scare scene was carefully described. It was so vivid. You did a good job as always @deraaa!

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Yeah. Thank you so much ❤️❤️❤️

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In my opinion, the text reflects the protagonist's feeling of insecurity and emotional disappointment. The narrative describes his connection with nature, which is negatively affected by darkness and fear. In addition, the protagonist experiences a series of uncomfortable and misleading situations, which leads to a breakdown in their friendship.

The text conveys a sense of disillusionment and disenchantment with regard to personal expectations and relationships. Through the first-person narration, the reader can perceive the protagonist's frustration and sadness at being betrayed by his friend and facing the reality of his choice.

Overall, the text evokes an atmosphere of intrigue and emotional tension, highlighting the importance of trust and sincerity in interpersonal relationships.

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Thank you so much for your enlightening contribution. I never saw it that way but you opened my eyes.

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