The outbreak// The inkwell writing prompt

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William yawned and continued with his work. He was already feeling sleepy but struggled to stay awake for a few more minutes to finish up what he was working on. He slipped the coffee that was growing cold already one more time hoping it would keep him awake. Soon his eyes couldn't carry him as he fell asleep. Juliana, his 10 years old daughter, was outside with her peers playing while her mum had gone to the supermarket to get some stuff. Juliana noticed smoke coming from the building. At first she thought it was her dad cooking until the fumes got stronger and fire burned down the wood from the ceiling.

She remembered her dad was inside and had slept a few minutes before she joined her neighbor's kids outside. She ran to the door and struggled to open it but it was locked, she could hear her dad's faint voice as he coughed persistently. She ran to her neighbor's house but everyone seemed to have gone out for the weekend.

She remembered her mum had once called her phone number to her hearing and she memories it. She tried to recall it, and after a few thoughts, she was able to collect the numbers.

She ran to the public telephone stand and dialed the number, she was relieved when she heard her mum's voice.

"Mum, dad is trapped in the house and the house is on fire" she said immediately.

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Quickly, her mum called the fire service and with no hesitation they arrived at the location within a few minutes. The fire was already burning down the roof, so they decided to rescue the trapped man first. They broke into the building and saw Mr. Williams lying on the floor helplessly. They carried him outside and rushed him to the hospital.

"Is there any other person trapped in the building?" The fireman asked Juliana who was sobbing.

"No, it was just my dad that was inside" she said amidst sobs.

The firemen tried to quench the fire and after about an hour, the fire was completely quenched.

It was later discovered that Mr. Williams had dozed off while he was preparing breakfast and no one was inside to notice the smoke earlier.

"How are you doing Mr. Williams" the doctor asked.

"I'm fine, thank God for my daughter Juliana who had called her mum earlier. I was already choked with the smoke and my body was weak, I couldn't do anything when I realized the room was filled with smoke". Williams said.

"Darling" Juliana's mum called Julianna who was sitting next to her dad on the hospital bed. "How did you know my number?" She asked

"I once heard you calling your number out to someone on the phone and I was able to remember it." she said.

The story was spread abroad and people saw the need in teaching their children how to call out their phone numbers off heart.



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intersting story, but you failed to show the part were mr william probably should be struggling getting out of the house, since, i think you are using a third-party-narrative point of view, also what caused the fire outbreak

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Maybe you missed some part. All you asked was narrated in the story.

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This is a credible appropriate narrative for the prompt,Unlikely Hero. There have been children who remembered the emergency number for police and fire. These children actually have saved lives. Good job!

Thank you for sharing this story with the ink Well community, and we appreciate that you engage with other authors.

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Yeah, it's incredible when children remember digits that are as important as that.

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I like this story very much, @dwixer. You develop the child's character well, created a credible scenario and finish it off with a reasonable resolution. All in all, a well-crafted, successful, enjoyable story!

Your writing is getting really good, my friend. You've been writing a lot in the last many months and it shows.

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Smile. Thanks for your positive feedback. I'm glad to know my writing is getting better by the day

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A story as well as a message to all of us how important it is to teach children to make decisions in the face of critical things. Thank you for writing it, @dwixer.

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You're welcome. Sometimes those little things could help in the future

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Such great daughter Juliana is. If it weren't for Juliana's quick thinking, William might not have survived the fire.

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True. It was her retentive memory that helped Williams survive the outbreak

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Who knows how Juliana must have been feeling at that particular time when asked about his dad been trapped inside

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Every person in that shoe would definitely be feeling sad and scared

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Brave Juliana! It's good to teach our children some basic things like first aid, fire fighting and how to respond to emergency. In real life, cooking and lying on bed is dangerous especially when you are alone. Nice story

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You're right. All that you mentioned are important. Thanks for reading through

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A smart girl there, she would have been confused like kids who barely know what to do in such a situation. Thank God she was able to save her Dads life.

And that taught other parents a lesson.

A good write up bro.

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Thanks. Indeed she was a smart girl. Thanks for reading through

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Hi @dwixer. A very well told everyday story. I loved it!

It has sensitivity, dramatic arcs and suspense. Juliana is a believable and brave character.

Also, the story has a good lesson for all parents.

Best regards.

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Thanks, I'm glad you consider the story to have morals for parents

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