The Heir

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The waves from the waterside began to rumble and suddenly, a deafening silence filled the atmosphere. The priest reached for a python skin bag around his neck. He poured the content on bare sand. His pupils faded away and he began to fiddle with bones, feathers, and cowries parting them from side to side. ”I see the princess, I see a crown and a kingdom, I see a throne. Ahh!” The priest’s body vibrated like jolts of electricity through a body. “Ahh! I see the water. It comes. No! it races in anger and it washes the throne away. Everything. The princess and her crown”. The waves rumbled again even more aggressively this time.

“What does that even mean?” My father thundered irritated by the priest’s revelation. “My king, it is what the bones say”.The priest looked in the direction of the waves. His eyes went white again. “If the waters could talk, they would speak”. He began gathering his bones one after the other cautiously and placing them in his bag.

“Don't you understand? It means that the Princess is going to drown”. My mother ran to stand in front of my father. She searched his eyes with terror in her own. “Starting today, she will be banned from visiting the water. Any guard found accompanying her will be in serious trouble”. She turned toward the guards with fire in her eyes.

The priest looked at her and without a single word, he shook his head and walked backward out of the palace. I was only six years old but I remember that event like I knew my palms. It was the day earth almost stood still for me. How was I ever supposed to live without visiting the water? It was my favorite happy place.

When I turned twelve, I conceived a means to sneak off every night to my paradise. I called it ‘my cradle’ because, for me, it was the place I felt alive the most. The feeling I get when I am inside the water is total peace and submission. The water always had a way of making me feel safe and at home. As a child, my parents never understood this.

“Listen to me Leah, you are heir to this throne and nothing must happen to you. You must remain safe”. My mother's words were always so odd to listen to. I always wondered if it was an heir she wanted or a child.

Things changed when I began having terrible dreams. I would see myself walking into the water and being slowly carried away by the waves. When I told my father about my dreams, he was hysterical. He sent his guards on a journey of a thousand miles to the Loca fountain. The fountain whose water supersedes all waters and is said to have the powers of protection. I wore the very tiny water bottle with a rope around my neck ever since. My parents felt it would protect me from the priest’s revelation.

The day I turned sixteen, my mother came to me and said.“You need to be ready my darling. This week is your pre-coronation. You shall be introduced to the people as the princess and future ruler of the land, the Queen”. My mother’s joy knew no bounds.

That day, the villagers had gathered by the water near the palace. Drummers created magical sounds, and maidens wriggled. Cups of wine and meat flew in trays. It was an epic moment of merriment and excitement.

“You already know what today is and why we are gathered here”. My father got off his throne, adjusted his crown, and began to speak. “My precious daughter Leah is my heir. Your princess and future queen”.

The priest came forth. He was handed a crown by my father. I stepped forward feeling exquisite in front of everyone. However, there was an uneasy feeling inside of me. Carefully, the priest tried to place the crown on my head but it fell off. Everyone exclaimed with eyes wide open. It was taboo for the crown to fall off the head of a royal. He tried three more times but the crown would not stay on my head. I froze and the hair on my body stood.

“Give me that”. My mother angrily snatched the crown and tried to force it on my head. Every time she tried, it fell. It only meant one thing, that the crown and throne weren't mine.

“I demand an explanation”. The King roared. The seer displayed his bones and once again his eyes turned white. “My king! I see the princess with her crown on a throne. That is what the bones say. Leah will rule”.

“Then why is the crown on the ground and not on her head?”. My father’s eyes were bloodshot.

“I only convey the message of the gods. I do not interpret them. At that moment, a cascade of cool wind enveloped the air. The silence was replaced by an eerie siren sound.

“My heir”. A Very strong resounding voice erupted from the water. The waves began to spark splashes of water violently. Soon, the particles began to align in big waves following a pattern. The pattern swirled splashing water all over until it revealed a figure. Everywhere went dead silent. Fear could be smelled in the air.

A being emerged from the water. It was as though he commanded all the gravity of the water body. With every step he took, the waves vibrated splashing in big puddles unto the earth. He was tall, strong, and oozed confidence. The people had begun to shudder at the spectacle. No one had ever witnessed anything like this before. Not even the priest and wisest ones of the land.

“It is time child, let's go”. He came to where I was standing and held my hand. Fear gripped me at first. I ripped the tiny water bottle from my neck and splashed it on him. But then I began to feel it. That peace and home the water brings. It was a sensation that passed through my entire body. Instantly, my fear vanished and was replaced with longing.

He touched his wet skin and examined the moisture on his palm. He smiled. “What did you think the waters of loca were going to do to me? I am water itself-seed of Poseidon. And you? You are a mine”. His voice reverberated in the air.

“A pact is a pact”. My mother stepped forward and spat. You promised you would let me have her”.

“You prayed to me for a child. I let you conceive by placing my seed in you, only if you’d fulfill your part of the bargain. To spare her human royalty. No child of mine oversees the affairs of mortals. You broke the pact and now, my kingdom needs an heir. He lifted his hands into the air.

“Come dear child. Come home. Your kingdom awaits you”.



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The first response that comes to mind is, Wow. Very nice denouement. You build toward the conclusion, and yet it packs a wallop. Great hook. Wonderful use of the prompt. Your story flows as though it has come from the pen of a natural story teller. Very nicely done.

There were a few minor errors (mostly typos), which careful proofreading would take care of.

Thank you very much for sharing this mythic story with us, @kei2. We appreciate that you engage with other authors in the community.

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Thank you so much for the opportunity to write here. It is a pleasure. I will take note and proofread my work. As always, I make sure to engage with other writers.

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As always you fascinate your readers with an enchanting story from the realm of Greek mythology. Now who will rule the human throne? I guess the King will have find another heir! 😄 I enjoyed reading this story. Well done!
!LADY !LUV

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Thanks Kemmy. I am sure the king will have to find a new heir. Of his seed this time.

Aha. I was going to tell and thank you for inviting to that contest the other day. So I entered the next one and omg, I loved it. The interaction and rewards...just omg.

https://ecency.com/hive-152524/@kei2/coffee-crush

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I am sure the king will have to find a new heir. Of his seed this time.

Well, good luck to him on that. I hope he succeeds in his attempt. 😄

I'm happy you participated in the coffee contest. Not many fiction writers know about it, so I thought to spread the word to fantastic writers like you. The reward is another interesting perk! 😉 Keep writing. !PIZZA

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💃💃💃💃
Thank you.

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Wow, what a story..

I kept my fingers crossed while I read, trying to understand what was going to happen next..
And like the perfect writer that you are, you kept me glued eager to know more and more...

Nice way to end such an engulfing story...thanks for sharing ❤️

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Thank you so much for reading. I’m so glad you enjoyed it this much.

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The feeling I get when I am inside the water is total peace and submission. The water always had a way of making me feel safe and at home.

Me too. I get this completely.

I love the parable like, mythical, fairy tale quality to your stories and you write with such beautiful detail. You are a writer I hate missing here!!!

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Thank you so much. I like fairy tales because they open up a lot of possibilities.

I see you have something in common with Leah.

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Staying glued to the lines and watch how the twists unfolded with every passing word is why I came to.love this piece.
Great effort you had put into this, definitely.

The King would have to look elsewhere for a heir.

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Thank you. I'm glad I was able to immerse you in my story. It is that factor I am learning to build upon.

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Can I be the heir? I am blown away by how much creativity you put into your stories.

Probably this is the third or fourth I have read but you never cease to impress me, great story. The priest's vision was true but not being able to define it was the problem.

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I’m excited that you like my stories. Thank you so much.

Yes. The priest had the vision but didn’t have the discernment to decipher it. It remained a mystery until it was time.

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The bits of Greek Mythology! Ahhh how elegant and well wriiten! I really love this story. It reminds me of a book I read about gods and olympus. Well done dear. Came in from Dreemport

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I'm glad dreemport led you to my blog.
Yes, the Greek thing. I wanted to infuse it but wasn't sure. I'm happy it came out the way it did.

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Does this mean the king wasn't the real father? That was shocking to me. How could someone ask for a child elsewhere other than God and not think such a day like this won't come?

So sad, Leah will be returning back to where she came from. Though, I enjoyed the story. You wrote beautifully 👏👏

I popped in through Dreemport 🤗

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Oh yeah. Technically, the king wasn't her real father. Leah was gotten from the water by her mother. Sadly for them, her father came to take her back home.

Thank you so much for reading my story.

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Wow I congratulate you, for a moment I thought it was a writing of some author, then I went deeper and can apresiar your dowry, I congratulate you thank you for sharing, I hope to read some other wonderful story like this, This post I got it in @dreemport

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Oh wow. Thank you so much. I'm happy it made such an impression on you.

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