PAIN OF LOVE~The Ink Well Prompt January Contest

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Hilary is a young man in his mid 30s. He is jovial and gets people's attention as fast as flash. He has a positive vibe and this makes it difficult for anyone to ignore him when he initiates a chat. Hilary is so generous that even church rats can attest to his big heart.

He thought it's best time for him to get a woman as a wife. One day, he went to a party and that's how he met the woman that changed his personality. He was very vivid with his intentions and Lily pretentiously accepted his proposal.

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After six (8) months of being in a relationship, Hilary felt it's the best time to make a move. He made a move by asking Lily to be his wife only to get the shock of his life. Lily betrayed his love for her by rejecting to marry him.

"I can't marry you Hilary, you are a good man, you shower me with everything and you have all the qualities a woman wants in a man but I can't marry a man who is not from my tribe". Lily said.

Hilary tried his best to talk Lily into accepting his proposal but to no avail. He built a fortress around his heart with his mind sealed never to get hurt again by a lady.

He had to relocate to another city far from his hometown where no one knew him. He had no friends, always by himself and hardly party or talk to ladies.

Not until one day, he met a lady on a bus. The bus had just one space left, and that only space was where he sat, beside was Queen. The Queen tried to engage in a conversation with him but he refused to get into any chat with her. But Queen's friendly attitude put him at ease, they were in deep conversation, laughing and enjoying each other's company.

Queen and Hilary exchanged contacts after alighting from the bus. They began talking and chatting on the phone. Hilary began enjoying Queen's company and they both told each other about their past.

After months of relationship, Hilary decided to make a move and this time he got a response although he wasn't very excited. "I want to finish my degree before getting married, I love you and would love to marry you if you will be patient". The Queen told him.

"Of course, I will wait if only you won't hurt my already broken heart"

"I just have one (1) year left and I will be done, my finger is itching for that ring to get in if you are willing". The Queen said sweetly.

Hilary gently slid the engagement ring into her finger and lifted her up and hugged her joyfully and the crowds roared in amusement and congratulated them. Gradually, the old Hilary personality that he swept under the carpet after Lily hurt his heart began to grow out beautifully like a flower.


                    THE END

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Hilary learned a hard lesson and had his heart broken, like so many people with their first love.

Here's a tip for you: Consider adding some dialogue between your characters, as well as some action.

These are two important elements of quality fiction that can bring a story to life. You have done a very nice job with the narrative, but it would be even better if you told some of the story in action, and added dialogue so the characters speak to each other. Here are a few resources for you:

Thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well, and for reading and commenting on the work of other community members.

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Thanks so much for the useful tips on how to add dialogue. I'm grateful.

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Thanks so much for the useful tips.

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First love are always admired, the story went absolutely well, thanks for this..

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Thanks for finding the story goodmThanks for your amazing comments.

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Love is a beautiful and blissful emotion that can bring joy and happiness to our lives. It is a feeling of deep affection and connection that can be shared between two people, or even between a person and an animal. Love can bring a sense of peace and contentment, and it can make us feel safe and secure. It can also bring a sense of purpose and meaning to our lives, and it can help us to grow and develop as individuals. Love is a powerful emotion that can bring us closer to each other and make us feel alive. It is a beautiful and blissful emotion that can bring us joy and happiness.

Thank you for sharing your beautiful story. I simply like it...

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Thanks for the beautiful contribution. You are right with all you said. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work.

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Giving love a second chance worked out well for him though it can be really tough opening up again after getting hurt once.

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Yes, that's very right. Opening the heart to love again after being hurt is very difficult.

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Yeah, breakfast is for everyone, Hillary got his but luckily for him, it was only once.
Thank God things turned out well for him

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It was so beautiful for Hillary once again as love smiled at him. His first love made mistake for turning him down and this mistake led him to a good lady.

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