"Ill Heart" (Original Poem)
Ill Heart
With the desperation of echoes,
We mingle in the crowd,
What is it that concerns me,
My soul tends to reach?
Watch repetitive sounds,
Whispers in my ears,
I tend to run, run, run.
Exasperation and remedies,
Bound me not.
Then what stands still,
Amid the crowd of thousand echoes?
What is that sound,
astounds me to the core.
What dilemmas are, what
Seizes the soul.
Emblems of darkness,
Entraises the dark.
What here looms,
Roams about.
Shred of seasons,
Passes to encompass,
How many roars, abhored
The grounds.
Depletion of turmoil,
Still exists. Conditions,
Revise in cycle,
Unless the turn withdraws.
Exasperation and remedies,
Bound me not,
Then what stands still,
Amid the crowd of thousand echoes?
With the desperation of echoes,
We mingle in the crowd.
What is it that concerns me,
My soul tends to reach?
Watch repetitive sounds,
Whispers in my ears,
I tend to run run run.
The End!
By naming it "Ill", I am not exactly defaming it or demeaning it. My sole purpose is to express the state of it while our heart is ill. This could have been written differently, but I tried it this way,
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Love your poem!
thank you 😇 If I may ask, what did you like about it?
I liked how you convey the human misery through the shadow of blending with others. It only implies how people long for something they do not know.
Yeah. I often feel that way. My soul yearns to know the unknown more too. Yours doesn't? I guess that's what keeps us going and stable at the same moment. Don't you think?
I too have random thoughts like that. I even posted it on my blog just recently
yeah, read it. It was a good write-up.
Really? Thank you
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I really felt the urge to remain silent and read by paying attention to sounds, I don't know why. Perhaps, listening to ourselves sometimes can be a scary thing, because of the fear. We might even think that our mind is sick, but in the end that is the voice that will carry us through everything in life, success and defeat, our inner voice.
I enjoyed your kind of writing a lot @tahminasyed, keep it up!
Thank you @cesarj21, will all of your motivation and support, I can keep on expressing more and more with confidence. It is true that our inner self can be scary but, it is also true that it is beautiful. People ought to get attached to the beautiful self and they tend to forget that the ill self exists too. We are humans after all, with good and bad, but the best. Shaping our lives accordingly, can lit both the inner selves we shelter inside.
Very cool poem, I identify a lot with it I love the image, we always want to do something but there is always the doubt, and that inner voice appears in all of us, but so life is very beautiful with all that, Blessings and nice day ♥.
Yes, indeed life is beautiful with all the good and bad in it. It is beautiful.
kötü çeviriye rağmen muhteşem bir şiir. Tebrikler.. Takipte kalacağım. Lütfen devam edin yazmaya.
Ah, did you translate my poem to understand the meaning? I clearly used google translate to understand what you commented. Was the translation poor?
Kötü çeviri ama kelime seçimleri mükemmel. Ben beğendim şiiri 🙂
Ah, thank you so much. You went to extra lengths just to read and comment. Thank you so much, this truly means a lot to me.
Google translate doesn't do quite a good job in translating poems, lyrics or so. It is better to use it for translating direct sentences. Thank you once again.
The tone of the picture is also felt in the words. And vice versa. Very well done keeping that feeling throughout the poem.
Thank you so much. I try to do so but didn't know how much of it made sense. Thank you for your review.