RE: THE STRANGE ORDER

This is a catchy story. It has a lot of potential. You probably could have developed it more. For example, you could have given us a better idea of what the cemetery looked like. This would have been a good opportunity to create atmosphere. A couple of more opportunities: in the beginning, you could have set the stage for the creepy events that followed by describing the way Jimmy felt about inheriting the shop. Or, even more significantly, you could have given us a richer description of the old man, the way he was dressed, the way he walked, his complexion. Were his eyes peculiar? Details like that really round out a story.

Still, have have good material here and you handle it competently. Nice finish.

Thank you for sharing this with us, @cheeamaka.