RE: Leonard Cohen and Lord Bryon - Workshop 17/06/22

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Broken Bones

Snap
Pain
Broken Bones
Neglect
Pain
Crooked
Not Healed with Time
Pain lingers ‘til
Snap
PAIN
Rebroken

Snap
Pain
Broken bones
Reset
Pain
Aligned
With Time and Rest
Heals Stronger still
pain’s memory
fades
with time

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Excellent work. I like the use of short lines. One small piece of criticism is that the word is in fact till, it's not an abbreviation of until but its own word. You can fact-check me. :)

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Huh! Interesting :) learned something new lol

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