What Was Left | A 3-Part Weekend FreeWrite

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Greetings, everyone

This is my entry to #WeekendFreewrite organized by @mariannewest. Details here. Prompts in bold italics.


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What Was Left

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The dog was whining at the door, obviously distressed, but she couldn't see anything in the darkness.
Of all nights she had to be left alone on this one. Just when the blackouts were back and the cloudy sky kidnapped the moon leaving her and her dog in pitch blackness. Bobby was an old but still energetic mongrel that depending on the light of the day and the state of its fur could pass as different breeds. The old lady had learned to recognize all his looks and noises, growls, barks, and whining. The one he was doing tonight was new and frightening.
It reminded her of those spiritualist sessions where the medium was possessed by a spirit and started to speak with an otherworldly voice. She never gave credit to any of those brujos, who for her were nothing but con artists. What she was feeling now, though, was the closest she had been to being scared.


[end of five minutes]

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In 1988 Colombia had earned $1.7 billion from coffee exports, just over the estimated $1.5 billion in cocaine sales. That feat had only been possible by strategic alliances between local authorities, farmers, and drug dealers. Turning a blind eye to the progressive invasions of farms and uncultivated lands, which were the farmers’ reserve to rotate crops when the active farming land started to wear out, was the only guarantee these people had to keep their coffee farms; that until the cartel decided that they needed those lands too for other purposes.

[end of five minutes]

They did not need to ask for permission and, as you can imagine, they did not need to compensate the farmers either. The old lady had already been given the heads-up but she was proud and stubborn. Her husband had been killed despite his efforts to collaborate with the cartel and her sons had been killed by the paramilitaries for allegedly being collaborators.

They had learned to live life in a limbo, as simple pawns in a much complex game they could not and did not want to understand. To compensate for the unpredictability of life and death the workers in these plantations lived each day as their last. The celebration of the Virgin Mary had sent them all off to party in the town. It had always been the case that these festivities served as truce among warring factions who, despite their ferocity and lack of scruples, showed some inexplicable devotion and even fear to some religious images.

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An empty cup fell and broke against the cement floor as the old lady tried to find her way back to her room. Bobby followed her reluctantly whining his way back inside. Easy boy, she told him as she felt in the dark for the dog’s head. She found her way to her bed, sat down, and placed her rifle softly on it. For a second she thought the rifle was unusually heavier because the bed sank as if more than 100lb had been gently put to rest next to her. It was not the dog. He was still between her legs, now quiet but trembling.

[end of five minutes]

Is that you, Juan? She asked to the darkness. The dog whimpered as if he had actually understood the question and was meant to respond. We lost that war, didn’t we? She asked next. The dog’s voice came up again, this time echoing the room. She thought she heard noises outside, murmurs and hushes. She lay down in bed and felt the pressure and energy of another body lying down next to her. Together to the end. She said. A plaintive whine came from the floor, followed by a deep sigh. The old lady was there no more to see the armed men break into her house and take what was left of her family’s history.

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Mi hermano perdona la vaina, pero no entiendo mucho,me imagino que se trata de poner un cronómetro y escribir cinco minutos , arrancar como si fuera un una carrera de atletismo, un relevo con uno mismo, ja ja.
Me gustaron tus escritos, sobre todo el de la perra.
Me gusto mucho la frase "el cielo nublado secuestro la luna" muy linda.
Leeré bien el asunto, para ver si me pongo las pilas.

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Saludos, @acostacazorla
Si, este reto es muy divertido, puede ser exigente a veces, pero para mentes creativas como la tuya, sería un paseo en el parque.
En el post de la convocatoria, que generalmente sale los viernes, se incluyen los tres prompts o frases a usar. La idea es ver el primero solamente, escribir por cinco minutos emezando con esa frase y parar al cabo de los cinco minutos. si la idea no sta completa, a veces escribo un poco más pero dejo indicado hasta dónde alcancé a escribir con los cinco munutos. Luego paso al segundo prompt, que suele poner patas arriba la historia, misma dinámica, y finalmente el tercer prompt, misma dinámica.
Puedes traducir los prompts, si hay dudas me avisas y te aclaro, y escribir en español y luego traducir al inglés.

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Hey mate, Just a quick one...I noticed when scrolling through my feed that, your post has source as the first word. See image below. That's because it's the first word in your actual post. It would look cleaner if you removed that word source (the whole image source link) and dropped it down further in the post...That way your text would be the hero, not a random word. Just a suggestion, that you're welcome to ignore if you like. :)

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Thanks, mate
Edited.
I usually do not place the image before any word. It must have slipped. It certainly looks disrupting, that "source" word.
Appreciated

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No worries, I try to make my posts as presentable as I can and so like to offer my suggestions where required. Capturing attending right from the outset gives us a better chance of getting someone to click into the post. It wasn't a criticism of course and am glad you didn't see it as such.

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Absolutely.
I have been learning from people like you who, over the course of two years, first on Steemit, now on Hive, have provided generous and timely feedback on form and content.
I try to do the same whenever I can and I tell those I bring to the platform to do the same. That's part of the sense of community, I think.
Again, thanks for the tip.
I guess it's Tuesday already over there, so happy and productive Tuesday

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Learning from others is smart.

Yeah, Tuesday, almost 10am...I'm working, or am supposed to be. 🙂

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