Theinkwell fiction challenge | The sign of good fortune

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The sign of good fortune

Lying on his back on the white sands and exhausted by the great effort, he felt the cold slipping through the wet clothes. The clear sky looked splendid, full of twinkling stars, and a huge moon that emerged from the ocean horizon seemed amazing. He thanked God for being alive.

When he set sail for paradise, he never imagined the capsize of the sailboat with which he crossed those places so many times to enjoy his private island. The unfortunate encounter with the huge cetacean led him to the current predicament. He did not blame the animal, simply, an accident product of the congruence of the circumstances that rarely happens.

The sudden blow broke the keel, as if it were an eggshell, throwing it overboard, the surface of the water momentarily lost its apparent calm, and saw a large tail emerge, which immediately flattened itself again against the ocean until it submerged definitively.

Instinctively he swam in the opposite direction to that horizontal tail, trying to get away, he stopped, turned and kept afloat, saw his beloved boat sink, everything was so fast and absurd, he could not believe what had happened.

Staying there floating, waiting to be rescued was a certain death sentence, swimming would keep him warm, he just had to choose the right direction, he knew he was close to the small islands he had left behind.

A shooting star appeared in the sky-dome drawing his attention, he recalled the classes on star-based maritime orientation, he had only to identify the constellation of the southern cross and swim back to where he remembered seeing the islands. Curiously, the meteorite, like a shooting star, went off in the direction it estimated to find the island.

He swam rhythmically, taking advantage of the current in his favor as if dancing with the sinuous waves. He visualized reaching the shore and without realizing it, when he began to feel the rigors of muscular fatigue, the moonlight showed him his salvation. That remote island was not his! but necessarily, he thought, if I survive, I will have to incorporate it into the itinerary of my next adventures.

The intense cold made him get up from the ground to look for shelter, a second shooting star crossed the sky, he quickly interpreted it as a definitive sign of good fortune despite adversity, his prayers were heard.

The end.


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An original drabbler by @janaveda

Thanks for reading me. I hope this micro-fiction is to your liking. I would very much like to read your comments in this regard to enrich myself with your criticism.

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Fantastic read. Well crafted. Clear. Imaginative. And just the right size.

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Hello @litguru,

Thanks for your appreciation.

Take care a lot, and I hope you to very successful in the challenge.

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I enjoyed reading your story, @janaveda. It has a bit of Hemingway, The Old Man and the Sea, twinkling and echoing in its sparse and charming phrasing.

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Hello @jayna,

I am very flattered by the benchmark.

Thanks for your nice comments.

Take care a lot.

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