The Ink Well Fast and Furious Festival - Day 2
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Task One
Describe a room (eg kitchen, bedroom, living room) in a character's house in such a way that it tells us about a person's greatest hopes and fears.
My exercise
The room was clean and impeccably arranged. The window was almost always closed, but on sunny days the room was lit through it. Three walls were painted white, while the wall behind the TV was dark green. Nothing hung on them.
Women's shoes had been left on the front door with puddles on the soles. The smell of freshly lit incense and the shoes indicated that it was five o'clock in the afternoon, tea time.
Task Three
Choose a famous moment from history and create a new fictitious element: write about the setting. For example, "A romance for Napoleon just three days before the battle of Waterloo."
My exercise
The rectangular table occupied the entire room that had no windows. The thirteen men sat around the table, and a lady came and went with food and more wine through the only wooden door in the room. Peter looked at her with lustful desires but every time he went to say something to the lady he was always interrupted.
It became dark, and it was necessary to light some candlesticks to keep the room lit. Jesus had already told him that he would betray him three times, but Peter, though he was offended, had forgotten the prophetic words. He raised his glass each time to celebrate the magnificent dinner.
Some little mice also strolled about the room carrying bread scraps for their caves. Meanwhile, Peter was wetting the floor with dirt when he knocked the wine carafe off the table.
Everyone laughed at Pedro's disaster. They helped him up and laid him down on a wall, also made of earth. They moved the long wooden table until it was placed near another wall. Then they began to dance in the center of the room to happily say goodbye to their master who, also dizzy from the wine, had fallen asleep next to Pedro.
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I really enjoyed your description of the living room. It's very detailed and specific, so your words create a vivid impression. Excellent work!
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STOPThe vivid detail of each section intrigues the reader.
The spartan furnishings in the first piece, matched with conspicuous care suggests a person of great education who has fallen on hard times. You set the scene for the introduction of a complex personality who is facing challenges (the conflict, perhaps, in your story?).
In the second piece, Peter is so human. But my favorite part is the mice. Such a detail adds not only interest but also makes the scene more real.
Nice job. I have trouble visualizes spaces as you do. Maybe because I spent most of my life eschewing eyeglasses :))
Thanks for reading @agmoore. Indeed, the first scenario is the entrance for a person who has personal conflicts. His values and his education are hit by something that we don't know what it is yet.
The white walls contrast with the puddle on the soles of the shoes (something unusual for such a scrupulous person). Conflicts are coming!
She retains the homely custom of teatime, which indicates her social status.
In the Peter and Jesus scenario, the ratters are essential. They not only offer the perception of poverty or humility of the scenario but they add veracity.
I have started to organize my schedules to do these exercises correctly. That is, writing and checking the writing time, and then making the comments.
But today I read long and complex exercises from the participants. Beyond writing a scenario they have narrated a story.
This has confused me because I thought they were simple exercises. What I have read from other users is a story that needs more than 25 minutes to be done.
I think it's great that you are participating. The idea is to do what you can and learn from that, and from each other. Although I wasn't in on the design of #fastandfurious, I understand that its purpose is to be a kind of virtual writing workshop. Focus on different parts of skill development, analyze the efforts of others, and in the end come out with a better understanding of your own process. So, everything you do is a plus.
It's a great virtual workshop!
What makes me uncomfortable is that I follow the instructions, ... always! But I noticed that people are writing stories and I didn't do it because I followed the instructions.
In any case, I am enjoying the workshop.
Thanks for the feedback @agmoore
Hello @marcybetancourt In you Task 1 you provide a good description of the living room. The literature books above the television suggest the woman is an avid reader.
I'm having a hard time connecting the shoes with the space. I was under the impression the shoes were left outdoors.
The idea of the shoes (I failed to indicate a brand name shoe) and the puddle on the soles was to indicate contradiction. In this way I make the entry for the following paragraph where the woman is in a personal conflict.
Thanks your comment @justclickindiva
But are the shoes in the living room? Maybe I missed that.
Excellent descriptions @marcybetancourt. It would be really hard to tell if you missed any detail of the living room.
You task two is also beautifully written. It made me laugh to a certain point and here I am, wishing that we read stories like this in such hilarious manner. I think what makes you better writers is the fact that we can fix ourselves in any situation and write from our point of view. I love the icing you gave to the story of Jesus' last supper. Great work there.