Inkwell prompt #31 - 1| "Where is Mrs. Cruz?"

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At 11:35 in the morning, I received a call from Mr. Cruz. He reported that her wife was lost and it has been 3 hours since then. I decided to come personally as a detective. My name is Tamar and I've been in this kind of job for almost 10 years already. There were cases I failed to solve and it felt very frustrating sometimes. It's unavoidable due to lacking clues and witnesses.

12:30 I arrived at the house of Mr. Cruz. He stated the details after he welcomed me. No more formalities and immediately I started asking questions. He answered me right away and told me everything that might be a lead for helping him to find his wife.

He said that his wife was gone for 3 hours when he arrived at the house. When he left to go to work his wife was still there. She even served breakfast to Mr. Cruz. He also included that when he left, his brother Jone was there. He asked his brother to borrow one of his cars. He didn't suspect Jone because he is his brother. It's just that there's no one there when he left but only his brother.

I called Jone for some questioning. He saved me time because he arrived immediately when I called him. Fortunately, he lives in the next block with his mother Ana. When I started asking Jone, Mr. Cruz suddenly punched Jone while crying and said.

"How could you do this to me? I love you, I treasure you because you're my brother, and this?"

Mr. Cruz attempted to punch again but I stopped him and asked him to leave. How can I hear Jone's side if Mr. Cruz was interrupting?

"Is it true that you were here when your brother left?"

I asked Jone right away when I managed to calm down Mr. Cruz.

"Yes sir, I was." He replied.

But he added another statement that it was hard for me to conclude that he was the one who captured Mrs. Cruz.

"I was here but when my brother left, I followed him but it took a while to leave because I closed the gate first."

I roamed around inside the house hoping there would be something to give me a lead. I checked the room, the kitchen, and the bathroom. No one's there and no other person can tell me more clues. I started thinking, thinking, and thinking until I had ideas in mind. I walked towards Mr. Cruz to ask more questions because I thought something was odd.

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"Mr. Cruz, when did you leave to go to work?"

"I think around 7:30 in the morning because our working hours start at 8."

He answered immediately and I began to suspects Mr. Cruz.

"If you arrived at your workplace at 8 or almost 8. Then how could you tell your wife was gone when you arrived at your house? You called me at 11:35 then you told me it was 3 hours already? How can you tell 3 hours passed already when she is gone?"

"Because ---"

I could tell he was panicking when he heard my statement.

"I was at the workplace for the past 3 hours and when I arrived home she was not there."

He said but a little bit of trembling of his mouth and eyes. I became so sure that he was the one who hid Mrs. Cruz.

"Okay, let's say you're just assuming it has been 3 hours already but how could you be so sure when you're at work? What if she was kidnapped at 9 or 10 or even at 11 in the morning."

I said to him with a confident behavior to bluff him and hoping he'd just admit his crime.

"If you were that sure she was gone for 3 hours already when you called me. There's no other justification that it's you who did since you were too knowledgeable about her disappearance."

He cried all of a sudden with so much sadness on his face. He's sobbing that he almost can't breathe.

"Yes, Mr. Detective. I was the one who hid my wife."

It was not that surprising when he admitted after because he followed his reasons.

"My wife and my brother are lovers. Both of them betrayed me, they thought I didn't know. I didn't confront my wife about this matter but I spied on her in silence and I couldn't believe what I learned."

I looked into the eyes of Jone and said.

"Mr. Jone, did you know that what you've been doing is a crime? Mr. Cruz could have killed you but he still loved you as a brother."

Jone just looked away, turned his back, and stayed standing.

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Later on, Mr. Cruz brought me into his basement where Mrs. Cruz was located. She was being tied and taped her mouth. She's crying and I untied her and untaped her. As soon as she's free she rushes into Mr. Cruz, keeps hitting, and even says.

"You criminal. I never knew where I was going but all of a sudden you tied me and taped my mouth."

I feel pity for Mr. Cruz because he just let Mrs. Cruz hurt him while crying silently.

"Maam, that's enough."

I thought I should interrupt what she's doing.

"Mr. Cruz is kind that this was what he only did to you. He learned about your relationship with his brother but he still loves you and decided not to kill you both which is allowed in the law."

Mrs. Cruz stopped and walked away.

"So, what are you going to do now Mr. Cruz?"

I didn't arrest him and just let them negotiate what they'd want but I left them with a warning to Mrs. Cruz.

"Ma'am, don't do anything stupid. Mr. Cruz sent me a video of your betrayal that can send you into prison."

She didn't say anything and I just left while smiling.

END...

mrnightmare



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Well, mrnightmare. What a surprise. A mystery story and a love triangle. I learned something in this story. Is it true that marital infidelity is against the law in your culture? That it is a basis for taking a life?

Wow. In the U.S. there would be a lot of people in jail and a lot of dead bodies :))

You do a really good job of leading us through the complexity of this mystery. I didn't have to retrace my steps to figure out who was married and who was cheating. It all became obvious as I read.

Ending it with that satisfied smile was quite good.

(I'll be back later to vote. VP is slowly replenishing)

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Yes, we have that specific law, if a wife will be caught having an affair like doing a lover should do. A husband or a wife has the right to kill them as long as right on the act. Even if you kill them you will not be in prison.

Thanks, I thought I didn't know how to write this type of story.

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Well said, @agmoore. Me too:

I learned something in this story. Is it true that marital infidelity is against the law in your culture? That it is a basis for taking a life?
Wow. In the U.S. there would be a lot of people in jail and a lot of dead bodies

Certainly would be. No need for the pandemic. That would wipe out half our population in six months time!

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:))

And I know some of them :))

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Me too...and have to look them in the face from time to time, even at the family reunion. lolol

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Bravo mrnightmare. You have branched into new territory and you have done quite well with this story. It is pleasure to read this from you. Thank you for posting the story in the Ink Well community. Thank you for consistently supporting other writers in the community.

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Even I was surprised by what I wrote. It's new to me and it was not easy. hahaha
thanks

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Love triangle ang peg. Oh gosh, naa pod Kaha nahitabo in ani noh? Siguro Pag mas guapo ang brader Taz naay abs hahahha..

Awwwwhhh. 😂😂😂😂😂

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hahahaha animel, isa kang salawahan kung maohon.hahaha

Uso baya sa social media kabit-kabit these days.hahaha

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What an interesting crime story. I'm excited to see you trying some new themes, @mrnightmare.net!

I was alarmed to read this:

"Mr. Cruz is kind that this was what he only did to you. He learned about your relationship with his brother but he still loves you and decided not to kill you both which is allowed in the law."

Is this true, in your country, that a man who finds his wife is cheating can kill his wife and her lover? Wow!

Anyway, nice work. And thanks for joining the contest!

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What an interesting crime story. I'm excited to see you trying some new themes, @mrnightmare.net!

I was alarmed to read this:

"Mr. Cruz is kind that this was what he only did to you. He learned about your relationship with his brother but he still loves you and decided not to kill you both which is allowed in the law."

Is this true, in your country, that a man who finds his wife is cheating can kill his wife and her lover? Wow!

Anyway, nice work. And thanks for joining the contest!

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Oh, and by the way, be sure to incorporate one of the prompt sentences into the story, as that is one of the contest requirements. (I looked, but I don't think it's there.) I'm assuming you chose the first one, "No one knew where she was going." It's okay if you change the sentence just a bit.

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Yes, it's true as long as a husband or wife caught the act. It is allowed and that husband or wife will not be sent to jail.

And also, I think I changed it when the wife said.

"I never knew where I was going and all of sudden he tied me taped my mouth." Is this not acceptable?

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Wow, what a crazy law!

That’s okay about the sentence. Most people are using it as is without modifying it. But we will accept it as you have it.

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Wow...hiding his own wife just because the brother loves his wife? This is not the b at method to do that, because the wife did not love him. There is no love among the two of them or else, the wife wouldn't have fell for his brother and all thanks to the detective for seeing the solution to the whereabout of woman.

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Much appreciated for reading till the end.

It's just hard to predict if we love someone too much even though we know it's not right.

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A crime and detective flash fiction! A brave take for you!
I love the simplicity with which you approached the story and unraveled the mystery in the end.
Brilliant work, @mrnightmare.net

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Indeed, undeniably I was arrogantly brave for writing a short story like which is my first time. It took me 2 hours in writing because I was unfamiliar with this kind of story. Thanks by the way.

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Hello @mrnightmare.net. I loved every bit of this detective work. Not hard to solve this one as both the spouse and brother-in-law were acting shady. It didn't seem as though the husband was too upset. I felt as though he knew her whereabouts. Either him or his brother.

As @agmoore said in her comment, it would be a lot of people in trouble if that particular infidelity law in your country was applied elsewhere.

I love your advice to the wife. Retaliation when knowingly in the wrong never ends well with the perpetrator.

Thanks for sharing your story. I enjoyed it.

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Oh, I'm flattered. I'm glad you enjoyed it even though I missed few details because this kind of story is new to me. Even so, I'm happy about the response.

Thank you, well in my country it's true. Although, I didn't see or hear someone took advantage of the privilege of the law.

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