RE: Witch: The girls's hunter (Theinkwell fiction challenge or Week-11-)

An interesting story! With some reworking it could be brilliant and super spooky! You have such an amazing creative mind.

I can tell you enjoy writing horror - fun isn't it! I did get a bit confused with the characters, so my feedback would be to go over and carefully make sure you're not switching from he to she or the names too often, and focus on one character's perspective within that one paragraph without bringing too many new people in or unneccessary back story that confuses things. Keep it simple, and focus on the plot points that really matter, especially in a short story. For example, here's how I'd rewrite your second paragraph:

Jesy cried for hours until she fell asleep. In the morning, her mother took her to see her aunt, a child psychiatrist. When she arrived, Jesy knew what the visit was about, but she didn't know how to tell Aunt Clara about what she had seen. Both believed the girl walked in her sleep until she fell. But she knew better; she saw the witch who murdered her. But how could she say this?

See how it takes away a lot of names and characters and focusses on what is important - the fact she can't tell the truth?

So from there, you'd then move into a more detailed paragraph about how Jesy really feels:

'From a very young age she tried to be normal, or whatever that means. She learned to control her fear so she could explain to herself that when she felt her bed moving, it was part of the feeling of having a bad dream, and she would soon wake up. It was the same thing now, talking to her Aunt. It was easier to say she was very scared when she saw her fall and thought that someone had pushed her, but believed it was her imagination.'

This last line switches perspective. How does Jesy know she is suprised?

'Her mother was a little surprised, Jesy doesn't usually lie, and she had never really seen her so disturbed.'

Instead, describe her suprise, and let the reader make up their mind. What does suprise look like?

'Her mother raised her eyebrows, like she did when Jesy tried to lie about who ate the last cupcake. Her bottom lip trembled, and her hands quivered in her lap. Jesy wanted to take the lie back, but it stuck in her throat'.

Hope you liked my feedback.