The Legendary Beginning of SuperLady

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IMG_20220610_043413_023.jpgPella in her cape

Long ago, about 500 years before, there lived a newly married couple housed in a farm. The couple had no riches, no jewelries, no fame but they were contented because had love and they cared for one another.

Neighbors envied what the man and woman both shared but not to the extent of wanting to get rid of them. The couple although had nothing, were hardworking and willing to make ends meet daily. This earned them more admiration and help rendered from their neighbors who were drawn to the cooperative couple.

The zealous attitude continued to wax stronger between the duo and they both made progress. Soon they had a farm of theirs and a cow with it. They later grew into a buying a bull which in turn mated the cow and gave them many calves. Things were all good and running in their new ranch called "The Two Hearts ranch".

Then the couple settled for a baby. They both made a promise to themselves to firstly settle down comfortably before bringing in a child into their world and now it was time. Few months later, Ameena took in. She was down with an illness during childbirth labor and her loving husband, Kamal was torn apart as he searched endlessly for a remedy.

After hours of walking and crying and searching and praying for his wife and child’s safety, he stumbled upon a landed space ship. Courageously, he ventured inside hoping to find help for his wife in labor. Then he meets the nice king of the space ship who gave him an antidote to heal his wife and ease her childbirth. In matter of time, Kamal and Ameena became proud parents of a baby girl they named Pella.

On Pella’s 18th birthday, her parents made their confession to her. While Pella was growing, she experienced strange things happen to her. She had that superficial strength she didn’t understand. She could also hear things from miles away and she experienced her movements sometimes at the speed of light. Mom and dad always told her stories of superheroes and she mostly compared herself to them especially when she experiences these changes.

The antidote Kamal collected from the kind King has caused Pella all the strange things she had experienced. Her parents explained to her that the reason why all those things happened to her was because of the antidote. They also warned her ahead of the growth of these superficial things. She would grow more strength than before and they also implored her to use these powers for positivity.

Pella heeded to her parents advice and she became the superhero in her neighborhood. As she clocked more years, hardly did she show any aging sign. Her powers waxed stronger and she dutifully took on the responsibility of safeguarding her parents and larger community from harm.

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Parece buen material para una película. Un cuento rápido tintado de ficción. Me pregunto cuál será la debilidad de la heroína Pella. Saludos.

Looks like good material for a movie. A fast-paced tale tinged with fiction. I wonder what the heroine Pella's weakness will be. Regards.

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So interesting story. I hope Pella keeps using the strength she has for the good.

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You've shared an interesting tale, @blackalbino1. Pella is blessed with supernatural powers for life after her humble beginnings.

Thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well, and for reading and commenting on the work of other authors in the community.

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I enjoyed your story, @blackalbino1. I hope you're open to feedback! One thing you might want to consider is adding action and dialog to your stories. When a story is all "narrative" (prose) it is like a summary of a story, instead of storytelling. The concept is called "show, don't tell," and we have an article about it in our catalog of fiction writing tips.

Here's an example. This is and example of "telling" because there are no details. Instead of writing the story in action, it is a summary of the action:

On Pella’s 18th birthday, her parents made their confession to her. While Pella was growing, she experienced strange things happen to her. She had that superficial strength she didn’t understand.

Instead, you could show this with action, dialog and interesting details. I'll just make something up as an example:

The day Pella turned 18, she watched her parents as they decorated her cake. Her father kept glancing at her, and her mother had a strange glow about her, as if she was harboring some kind of secret.

"Alright, you two," she said. "What is going on?"

Her parents exchanged another glance, and a smile.

"We have decided to tell you the truth about your past," her mother said.

Her father nodded. "It might seem hard to believe, but we received help from someone in a space ship. He provided a remedy that helped you come into the world safe and sound."

"What? Are you making this up?"

They shook their heads.

Pella laughed. "Is that why I'm so much stronger than everyone else?"

When they nodded, she picked them both up at the same time, and held them in the air in a tight hug. "At last, I know why I am like this!"

So, I hope that is helpful! Adding dialog and action is an important part of good storytelling. You can find some more information in our article, Action, Dialog and Narrative: The Dynamic Trio.

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I think your story's better than mine now, lol. Thanks @jayna, I really appreciate the feedback

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@jayna is a wonderful teacher ♥️ I hope you will read all of the writing tips, they help a lot :)

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What a great story :) I hope Pella does big things to help others ♥️

!PIZZA !ALIVE !LOL

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